My name is Shi Jia. My English name is Daisy. I come from China. I love my country. I'm very happy to study and enjoy my summer in the United States.
In my spare time,I have many hobbies. For example,I love listening to the music especially piano kind. I am always intoxicated with it. I also like singing songs, watching movies, playing the piano, going shopping, eating ice cream and so on. I don't like eating watermelon and chocolate.You may think I am a little curious.
I'm the only child in my family. Sometimes I feel a little lonely. So I'm very glad to make friends with all of you!
Shi Jia, you have written a cohesive paragraph. I would like to see you use more descriptive language such as adverbs and adjectives. I think you express yourself very well in English. I have one suggestion for you:
ReplyDeleteYou wrote "I love listening to the music especially piano kind." I think it would be better to write, "I love listening to piano music."
You followed the directions exactly. Grade for Post #1 = 98
Please write Post #2 about something you did last week, or over the weekend. Thank you!
ReplyDeleteyou don't like chocolate oh lalala!!!
ReplyDeleteHi, Shia Jia
ReplyDeleteI like your post. I understand you perfectly about feeling a little sad because I have two siblings and I miss them very much..=(..... But don't worry, you have a friend here too =)!
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ReplyDeleteHi, Shia Jia really you dont like chocolate :D ? Awesome post ever !
ReplyDeleteHi, Shi Jia.
ReplyDeleteThrough this article, I know something interesting about you. You are an outgoing girl. You will have many friends here.